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2.
Is the essays title thoughtful and creative? (Does NOT restate essay assignment; Does NOT use Essay
Paper Topic Comparative and is NOT Speak & Texts etc.) Yes or No
3.
Does the paper provide an interesting opener? Does the paper begin with a Theme Statement:
about the texts theme(s) or the papers topic designed to peak readers interest and to prompt reflection
on the topic? [Avoiding huge generalizations.] Yes or No
4.
5.
Do the ideas within the thesis match the ideas made in the opening sentence of the introduction? Yes or No
Does the author need to change/modify/reword anything to be the clearest and most effective? Yes or No
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If YES, what?
6.
From reading the introduction paragraph, state in complete sentences what you understand the
writer will be proving in his or her essay. (Do NOT rewrite the thesis)
Based on your knowledge of class content, is this a reasonable and provable assertion? Yes or No
The Body Paragraphs
7.
Does the essay meet the requirement of a minimum of nine chunks? Yes or No
Is the 1 CD : 2+CM ratio maintained and evident? Yes or No
Does every paragraph discuss both Speak and the connected texts? Yes or No
8.
A topic sentence contains both a topic and an assertion(opinion) and introduces the topic for the
entire paragraph. Does every Body paragraph begin with strong and relevant a Topic Sentence that
directly support the thesis? Yes or No
Does every topic sentence compare the themes by discussing both Speak and the other texts? Yes or No
If any NOs which sentences need to be improved, and what would improve them?
9.
Does every chunk begin with a Body Point an assertion that supports the topic sentence &
thesis, and which sets up the CD? Yes or No
10.
Does the essay meet the requirement of a minimum of nine concrete details? Yes or No
Is every CD (regardless of whether it is a quotation, summary, or paraphrasing) followed by an in-text citation? Yes or No
Are ALL of the concrete details relevant to the body points, topic sentences, & thesis (are they examples of what
the writer is claiming to prove?) Yes or No
If NO, identify which CDs could be strengthened/modified/changed (On the actual essay, put a question mark
next to the concrete details that do not seem to fit.)
Is every quotation preceded blending introducing it? Yes or No
11.
Are there 2-3 sentences of commentary for every concrete detail? Yes or No
Does the essay meet the requirement of a minimum of eighteen commentary sentences? Yes or No
Do the commentary sentences consistently tie the paper back to the thesis? Yes or No
Is there evidence that the author knows that this essay is NOT an opinion piece this is NOT the place to insert
personal responses to the war etc.? Yes or No
Do the commentary sentences elaborate on your CDs and focus on the connection between the two topics, and
what we can conclude from those connections? Yes or No
Are any of the commentary sentences repetitive or off topic? Yes or No
Mark a triangle next to any commentary sentences that are any of the following: inconsistent with the thesis,
irrelevant, repetitive, awkward, factually incorrect
Highlight any part of the commentary essay that is summary of the texts. (show the color here)
12.
13.
In the body paragraphs, does the writer use transitions ( words and/or phrases)? Yes or No
Circle any transitions that are misused the wrong meaning. (Ex: therefore instead of however)
What needs to be changed so that the transitions are smoother and more effective? (Help them to avoid
This shows that)
Does every Body Paragraph end with a strong conclusion sentence? Yes or No
Does every conclusion sentence restate the ideas in the topic sentences using different wording? Yes or No
Do the concluding sentences end the paragraphs on the same topic they started out on ( perhaps with a transition to
the topic of the following body paragraph)? Yes or No
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After having read the essay (multiple times), rephrase the main argument of the essay what has
its main topic & purpose been:
16.
17.
Is what you wrote in #5, # 6 and #15 all essentially the same argument? Yes or No
If No, clearly identify how they differ.
18.
How can this essay be revised to prove the thesis more clearly?
The silencing effect of rape the loss of voice and the effect that has on the person
Coping through turning pain into art
The difficult process of coping and recovering
Power struggles between the victim and the perpetrator regaining control
Alienation/Isolation from the rest of the world
Other
Please
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Fill
22.
Does the paper make use of a minimum of FIVE sources (Speak, min. 2+ Related Texts, 2+
nonfiction/expository research sources)? Yes or No
23.
Does the paper effectively make use of relevant research (citing at least two different sources)?
or No
What research is used, and to what purpose? What could be done to make this stronger?
In:
Yes
**The research my not be a separate paragraph, it must be integrated with the rest of the content .
24.
Is there evidence that the author understands that when comparing two or more things that are
mostly dissimilar, they do not focus on the differences they briefly acknowledge them (a sentence
should suffice) and move on, and when comparing two or more things that are mostly alike, they do not
focus on the similarities; or if they do, they state the significance of those similarities. They paper goes
beyond a side-by-side comparison. Yes or No
25.
Does the comparison stop after pointing out similarities between the wars? Yes or No
What is the So what assertion being made about the similarities?
Highlight, in a different color than above (CM section), any sentences that are unclear, overly wordy, or
awkward. (show the color here)
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27.
29.
Identify (by underlining below) the parts of the essay that need to be improved:
Organization Thoughts and topics are sequenced logically and effectively and Effective and flawless use of PVHS Writing Program
Thesis
Body points and topic sentences identifying key points of argument and moving the essay further
Relevant, well-chosen concrete details cited correctly
Significant and meaningful commentary
Embedding relevant research into the paper to solidify an assertion or to illuminate an example
Proving an overall argument throughout the paper the So What reflection on the similarities (moving beyond a basic comparison)
Understanding the book, texts, and the topic(s) being discussed
Avoiding summary/repetition, staying on topic, omitting the irrelevant
30.
On the back of their essay, write any further questions or comments that you have.
WS 1.1, LS
1.14LRA 3.0
LRA 3.0, 3.5
WS 2.2, 2.3
WS 1.4, 1.5,
2.2, 2.3
WS 1.3, 1.4,
1.5
LS 1.14
WS 1.4
LRA 3.10
WS 1.6, 1.7
WA 2.2
LRA 3.8
WS 1.1
WS 1.9
WS 1.1, 1.2,
1.4, 1.9
Introduction begins with an engaging opener / theme statement. The novels title & author are introduced, as well as the
other related texts (the research does not have too be mentioned here). The introduction PP includes a hook, transition that
establishes the context of the essays assertion, & a clearly defined thesis.
Conclusion restates thesis & brings the essay to a logical close. The essay ends effectively with closing thought or
reflection speaks to the So What question and the bigger picture of the topic. [No In conclusion etc.]
Clever and effective title that prepares reader for the thesis [Does NOT use Essay Paper or steal the authors title]
Thesis statement is clear and focused, and identifies a clear and supportable assertion on the topic. The
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Language Conventions
WA 2.0,
LC 1.1, 1.4,
1.5
WA 2.0,
LC 1.1, 1.2,
1.3
WS 1.7
Conventions & Mechanics: Standard English spelling, punctuation, capitalization, and manuscript form are used
appropriately for this grade level. (No contractions, no use of I or you, etc.)
Writing Style: Standard English sentence and paragraph structure, grammar, usage, and diction are used appropriately for
this grade level. Sentences are complex, and vary in structure. Sentences are written for CLARITY.
Document is TYPED and formatted in correct MLA style (see the Resource section in your grammar book and edline folder
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MLA Support for support) Heading, Header, Title, Text, 1 Margins, Spacing, In-text Citations, Works Cited
WS 1.7
Works Cited pg is properly formatted & contains all required information (see grammar book and edlines MLA Support )
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Total Points:
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