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Marissa McLaughlin ENGL 1102 21 September 2013 Assignment One Reflection Overall I feel that assignment one went

very well. When I first started the assignment, I was confused on what the expectations were, but through the in class discussions I was able to fully grasp the concepts that I was expected to explore in my paper. After completing the first draft and the peer workshop I was able to identify my papers strengths and weaknesses. One of my weaknesses while writing my paper was my ability to identify the discourse communities within my figured world. When I observed my world, I was able to locate the different groups but due of my lack of understanding of what a discourse community actually was, I was not able identify these groups as communities. My first draft had several other weaknesses but it also had a few strengths. I think that the strongest section in my first draft of assignment one was my description of Monkey Joes. I feel that I was able to accurately introduce the reader to the facility. My intent was to make the reader feel like they could envision themselves in the store without having to physically go there. One of the comments that I received from my group members during the peer workshop, was Very good description of location, giving me a good visual of Monkey Joes without ever being there. This comment from my group members encouraged me to leave my description as is for my revised version on assignment one. I received a couple of other praise comments from the peer workshop, but the criticism I received benefited me the most when I was revising my first draft. The most beneficial comment that I received from my group was about my description of the inflatables and the ticket redemption counter in the artifacts section. One comment stated Add a better description for the redemption center because of its significance to the children who come to Monkey Joes to play the games. From this comment I realized that the description that I gave did not accurately portray how important the redemption center is to Monkey Joes. For the revised version I added a description of the counter and the type of prizes that are available. My group also suggested that my description of the inflatables be more reader friendly, so I decided to clarify that the inflatables are what the children jump and play on. During the workshop I also realized that I did not incorporate the actors I described in my observations. I only refer to them as employees, so for the revision I identified each actor so that the reader is able to see how each actor behaves in the figured world. Overall I feel confident in my revised copy of assignment one. The section that I would like for you pay attention to is my description of Monkey Joes literacy practices. I would your

attention on this because I do not feel that I did this correctly and I would like your feedback so I have a more accurate version for the final copy for the portfolio.

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