ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Rhetorical Analysis of a Public Document

Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. Name of the drafts author: Joan Alvin Name of the peer reviewer: Kim G. Ray Reviewer After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric. The subject of the paper was very informative and precise. The author was very productive on identifying the analysis and subject as it relates to the public document by contributing factual information in the body of the essay. The author showed valid causes of ADHD and along with symptoms of this disorder. A substantial thesis statement was given to show the top of the essay. After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet. Rhetorical Analysis Content and Ideas

How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make about the public document he or she is analyzing? How successful is the writers summary of the public document under study? The summary was supported by the public document of the essay.

How effective is the writers explanation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance? The writer clearly provided informative information for reliable resources, which can be understood by the audience. How persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay? The author provided statistics and data as founded by the CDC.

How effectively does the essays content support the thesis by analyzing the document and evaluating its effectiveness according to strategies from chapter 2 of The Call to Write? I was not able to identify the thesis statement.

Organization

How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper? I was engaged in the essay which help me to read until the end of the essay. Please identify the writers thesis and quote it in the box below. I was not able to identify the thesis statement

How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essays ideas? The writer produced good details and description of the facts the entire paper. How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay? Could have had a little more of a conclusion instead of a summary. But great job.

Format How closely does the paper follow GCU formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with students name, date, course, and instructors name)? The essay had no header, was not double space nor did the paper have any indentions. This paper did not meet the GCU requirements. Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical GCU format? Are all sources listed on the references page in GCU format? Yes Is the required minimum number of sources listed? Yes

Language Use and Style

Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If No, please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone. Yes How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing? I would have liked to see more transitional words to make the paper flow. How would you assess the writers diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?

Grammar and Mechanics

Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If No, please provide examples of errors in need of correction. Yes Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If No, please provide examples in need of improvement. Yes

Three things that I liked about your draft are: 1. The writer presents informative facts.

2. The writer was substantial in showing how useful the CDC website is to the public.

3. Statistics and supported information was given in the essay.

Three things that could be improved are: 1. The GCU format.

2. Providing a clearer thesis statement.

3. Clean up the conclusion to read like a conclusion instead of a summary.