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Topic: History/Diary
CRITERIA SCORE
Opener (first 30 seconds): Grabs audiences attention with a story, question, etc. (topic is not clear) 5 /5
That is a very nice personal story to show how a diary can be useful
ELI5: Speakers speech is easy to understand, speaking slowly, small pauses between phrases 4 /5
I liked your pacing, but a few of your ideas require simpler explanationmaybe
powerpoint?
Memorized: Speaker doesn't use notes, speaks with confidence and memorization is complete 9 /10
A few minor pauses, but mostly great!
Notes:
I enjoyed your speech a lot. You showed great confidence and charisma. Your gestures
and eye contact were very effective and pleasant. You are a gifted speaker, and should
consider entering an English speech contest. One thing is that you spoke about a diary
and historical records, but its hard to see the connection between the two. With the
Hiroshima records, we can learn the dangers of nuclear weapons and teach future
generations. The benefits are clear. However, with a diary, you can remember an
exchange from a vacation, but how does such a memory benefit us? I want to know
why personal memories should be recorded like big historical ones. You can explain
this connection, but it wasnt clear in your speech. Moreover, your final call to action
didnt show us how we, as private individuals, can follow your advice if we arent
historians or journalists.