Content Did the writer "show" you his/her ideas or just "tell" you a bunch of things? The writers presented their finding effectively Did you see what the writer intended for you to see? yes Did the writer present unclear information? Can you locate it and explain what is unclear? No, it was clear What suggestions can you offer to improve the piece? I think there are some run on sentences, but overall this is a solid paper Did the writer cite appropriately? yes Organization Did the writer logically present his/her information? Yes, they did. Did the composition have you go between ideas, back and forth, without warning about the deviation in progression of thought? No, I thought the ideas in this paper were well presented Does the writer say one thing in one paragraph and then in the next paragraph, discuss something else without adequate transition (and explicit saying so)? No, i think the writers do a great job with transitions Did the writer introduce a new topic entirely at some point in the composition? No, it was all on topic Was this purposeful? If so, was its purpose implicitly or explicitly stated? If implicitly stated, how do you know? This was purposeful. The purpose of this paper was to inform college students about substance abuse and the affects it has on them, and it was explicitly stated What suggestions can you offer to improve the way the composition is organized? The way this was organized was great! I have no complaints. Coherence
Does each word, sentence, and paragraph work together to provide
coherence and unity of thought? yes What revisions can be made with regard to coherency? I think you guys have really good ideas and transitions, and it makes sense.
Grammar and Mechanics
Does the writer make the "fatal mistakes"? The writers do not make any fatal mistakes. Does the writer use you, we, our, or any pronoun (personal or general) that causes confusion? No Do all the verbs agree with its subject? yes Are verbs in the appropriate tense? yes Do pronouns have a reference and does it agree with its reference? yes What other grammar errors did you observe in the composition? I think there were some sentences that were run ons like the 4th sentence in the conclusion. Overall, there are not many grammar errors.
Style Sheet Format
What style sheet is the writer using? APA Did the writer format the paper according to the style-sheet selected, correctly applying the required conventions of the style sheet? (Focus on direct quotations, paraphrases, in-text citations, and bibliographic entries.) Yes. Did the writer compose a bibliography adhering to the style sheet guidelines? Yes. Students are encouraged to provide as much written feedback as necessary; however, the minimum amount of written feedback is an average of three comments per page Part 3a: Example Approaches to Frame Feedback responses If you are not certain about framing response to your peers about their papers, you may use the following the templates to inspire your response. ASK QUESTIONS
COMPLETE THE FOLLOWING PHRASES
I would like to know more about_____ because ____. I like this _________ because ______________ .